alt Hacker NewsThat's a possible interpretation but the verbosity of the original statement hinders understanding the actual intent which is I why I recommended simplifying and removing unnecessary redundancies.
That's a possible interpretation but the verbosity of the original statement hinders understanding the actual intent which is I why I recommended simplifying and removing unnecessary redundancies.
It's 40 words and makes three separate points in those words. I don't think it's too verbose, and I don't think your suggestion helps.