I know this is somewhat covered in another comment, but, the concepts described in the post could have been reduced quite a bit, no offense Dan. While I like the writing generally, I would consider writing and then letting it sit for a few days, rereading, and then cutting chaff (editing). This feels like a great first draft but without feedback, and could have greatly benefited from an editing process, and I think using the argument that you want to put out something for others to take and refine isn’t really a strong one… a bit more time and refinement could have made a big difference here (and given you have a decently sized audience I would keep in mind).
There is not much actionable here, as well intentioned as your comment is.
It's like saying this MR could use some work but not citing a specific example.
From my perspective, there is no chaff. I've already the read the entire thing from top to bottom over 20 times (as I usually do with my writing), I've done several full edit passes, and I've removed everything inessential that I could find. The rest is what I wanted to be included into this article.
I know my style is verbose but I try to include enough details to substantiate the argument at the level that I feel confident it fully stands for itself. If others find something useful in it, I trust that they can riff on those bits or simplify.